Friday, March 2, 2018

Week 7 Story: Amaterasu

The sun goddess Amaterasu and her brother, Susanowo, had what might generously be called a rocky relationship. Susanowo would not listen to reason, he caused problems for the mortals on earth and the other gods in heaven constantly, and he influenced his children to take part in his trouble making. He also had a habit of barging into his sister's palace, demanding her hospitality, trying to pick a fight with her, and terrorizing her attendants. Amaterasu's job ruling over the heavens would have been difficult enough without having to deal with her unruly little brother, and she always dreaded the times when he would show up at her palace gates.

And so, when he started one of his visits by bursting directly into the room where she was working on a thunderbolt, clearly in the mood to start a fight even more than usual, she decided that she truly wasn't in the mood to deal with it. She left to hide in a cave and give her brother time to get over whatever had caused his little temper tantrum. Hopefully seeing the consequences of a few days without sunlight would make him hesitate to be so rude to her in the future.

Amaterasu couldn't say exactly how long she stayed in her cave. It was hard to judge the passage of time when the inside of the cave was always bright with her radiance and the outside was perpetually dark. It couldn't have been more than a week at the very most when the sound of beautiful music began drifting into the cave.

Going to the mouth of the cave, Amaterasu saw the goddess Uzume doing a celebratory dance outside. Amaterasu had always been very close with Uzume, and the other goddess was a talented and lovely dancer, so Amaterasu sat in the cave's entrance to watch.

When Uzume's dance ended, Amaterasu called out to her. "What are you celebrating, Uzume?"

"Oh, haven't you heard?" Uzume called back, a mischievous smile pulling on her lips. "I have found a sun goddess to light our days and lead the heavens. Isn't that wonderful?"

Amaterasu narrowed her eyes at this strange and confusing answer. "Have you? I suppose that's good, then, though I can think of no one suited to the job."

Uzume's smile grew and she walked over to sit across from Amaterasu. "Oh, she's perfectly suited," she said. "Not to mention beautiful. The most beautiful goddess of them all, in fact."

Amaterasu raised an eyebrow. "So, you're appointing yourself to the position?"

Uzume laughed. "Oh no, not me. Here, I'll show you who it is. Truly, you'll be amazed."

Uzume pulled an ornate gold frame from her robes and held it out for Amaterasu to see. Amaterasu's own face stared back at her, the sun goddesses light reflected dazzlingly off of a mirror.

Amaterasu chuckled and rolled her eyes. "You're a terrible flirt," she said, standing up and offering a hand to Uzume. "If you wanted me to return you could have just asked."

Uzume grinned as she took Amaterasu's hand and pulled herself to her feet. "Where's the fun in that?" she asked. Her smile faded slightly before she spoke again. "You will come back, won't you? Things are not going well without you."

Amaterasu nodded and began walking back toward her palace, hand in hand with Uzume. "Yes, I'm coming back. I was always planning to, and if Susanowo hasn't learned his lesson by now, I doubt he will."

Uzume's smile returned in full force. "Wonderful! Everyone will be so happy to have you back." With that, she ran toward the palace, pulling Amaterasu along with her.

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                                              (Amaterasu emerging from her cave)

Author's Note: This story is based on The Miraculous Mirror. In the original, Amaterasu flees from Susanowo because she is afraid of him. Then Uzume tells her that the god's have found a new sun goddess who is more beautiful than Amaterasu and shows her a mirror. Amaterasu thinks her reflection is her replacement, rushes out of the cave to fight it, and the cave is sealed behind her. I thought that it didn't make any sense for Amaterasu to fall for a trick like that, so I turned the mirror thing into a joke between her and Uzume. I also had her leave because she was fed up with Susanowo instead of afraid of him, because I don't think the literal queen of heaven would be that easily frightened.

5 comments:

  1. Ugh little brothers are the worst.  I like how you separate the paragraphs to allow the reader to process one thought or idea at a time. Especially in so short a story, it really helps. I also appreciate the lengthy Author’s Note… it helps to locate me as a reader and participant in the class to understand where you’re coming from with the story.

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  2. Hey Emily!

    I loved reading this story! I like how you noted the pain and trouble Susanowo causes Amaterasu because it's relatable for a lot of us who have siblings! I also like how you changed the part with the mirror into a joke because it was really fun for the audience to read. I could also picture the exchange in my head which is always helpful! Great job with this story Emily!

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  3. Hey Emily!

    I really enjoyed reading your story! I know I might be in the minority but my little brother and I get along really well (probably since we are both guys). I really enjoyed the narration of the story as the characters really came to life! I also enjoyed the twist you used with the mirror. It added a nice sense of comic relief to the story! The scene itself was well written as I could picture the exchange. Great job!

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  4. Hi Emily,
    I really enjoyed your story. You are a very talented writer. I love your use of dialogue. The relationship between Amaterasu and Susanowoo is very relatable. I know by brother has quite the habit of barging into my room and demanding something. This makes me wish I had the sun so that I could hide it and teach my brother a lesson.

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  5. Hey Emily!

    Wow, I loved reading your story. I know that writing stories is kind of your major, but I was really impressed by the content of the story. I wish that I could write that good. Also, I am a huge fan of details and being able to imagine the characters in the story and I was definitely able to do that while reading your story. Overall, really great job! I am excited to read more of your stories in the future.

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